My WIP Is Broken – Fixing Part Four

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My WIP Is Broken

Fixing Part Four

confused 2Sixty days ago, I finished Part Two.  But…my outline wasn’t any good.  So, I fixed it, changing the story, and with a new outline.

Happier my new story, I started writing.  And writing.  And writing.

Way down at the end, was my hardest scene.  Her mentor would die after she let her pride get in the way of good judgement.  This was her All Is Lost MomentI cried.  I felt as bad as she did.  Like her, I had no idea how to go on.

In my outline, she would walk through her darkest thoughts, Dark Night Of The Soul.  She would have an epiphany.  And, like magic, she would come out of it, healed.  And I would start writing about Part Four.

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WIP – Part Three: Scene Twenty-Eight Drafted

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Part Three:  Scene Twenty-Eight Drafted

Read about Part 3, Scene 27.

01 consideringIt’s day eighty-four.  I’ve completed 66 scenes, with 15 to go.  My word count reached 125,929.  My target word count was 90,000.

What’s more, I just completed Part Three.  It includes 28 scenes, and is 60,080 words long.  This is, of course, far too many words for the size of the novel.

Looking back on what I just wrote, Deheya and the Loyalists entered River Bridge, seemingly safe, and on the verge of toppling Lord Christor.  Divisions existed, but they were less important than winning.  And then, with all his might and cunning, Lord Christor struck back, shattering the army and the Loyalists.  Deheya lost her son to kidnappers, and her pride led to the death of her mentor and friend, Captain Eward.  Finally, after realizing what she must change, she has regained control of much of her world, and is preparing to return to River Bridge.  This time, she has no illusions about what must be done.  And the Army is finally behind her.

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Looking back to Scene 27, Deheya and the army crossed the Great River to try to save Owens Mills from Kuha Kaun.  They failed.  General Naveen panicked.  Deheya took command of the army.  With the help of the top officers, they save man of the townspeople and avoided immediate disaster.

Unfortunately, the army is split.  Colonel Turlak and the civilians are on the Ston side of the River.  Deheya and the cavalry find themselves trapped between Kuha Kaun coming down from the north, and Colonel La Van holed up in River Bridge.

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In Scene 28, Deheya is with all the cavalry in the Loyalist Army.  Their only safe route is south, but it must end soon.  They approach the fortified town of River Bridge.
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WIP – Part Three: Scene Twenty-Seven Drafted

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Part Three:  Scene Twenty-Seven Drafted

Read about Part 3, Scene 26.

01 consideringIt’s day eighty-three.  I’ve completed 65 scenes, with 16 to go.  My word count reached 123,696.  My target word count was 90,000.

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Looking back to Scene 26, Deheya returned to the Loyalist Camp, determined to get them to enter the Bon Valley and opposed Kuha Kaun.  General Naveen’s lock of enthusiasm inspired no confidence on Deheya’s part.  After much trying, she convinced him to take the Army back across the Great River and save the Bon Valley.

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In Scene 27, Deheya and the Loyalist Army cross the Great River.  Their plan is to fortify themselves in Owens Mills and use the city walls to hold off Kuha Kaun’s larger army.  Even as they land, they discover Kuha Kaun is already attacking the town.

Deheya tries to steady General Naveen.  The battle begins, out in the open, favoring Kuha Kaun’s greater numbers.  General Naveen panics and Deheya takes over.  She convinces the other commanders to follow her.  The Loyalists manage to rescue most of the townspeople.  After the battle, Colonel Turlak and most of the infantry are back on the Ston side of the River.  Deheya, and most of the Loyalist cavalry are still on the Jaeni side of the River.

Deheya and her army find themselves between Owens Mills to the north, and River Bridge to the south.  With Kuha Kaun pursuing them, she turns south, heading toward River Bridge.  She sends Colonel Grimn on ahead, to see if eh can find a way for them to enter Christor’s stronghold.

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WIP – Part Three: Scene Twenty-Six Drafted

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Part Three:  Scene Twenty-Six Drafted

Read about Part 3, Scene 25.

01 consideringIt’s day eighty-two.  I’ve completed 64 scenes, with 17 to go.  My word count reached 119,898.  My target word count was 90,000.

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Looking back to Scene 25, Deheya travels to her Father’s camp.  Pia Isa is physically healed, but the stress and strain has taken its toll on him.  When she asks for his help, he declines.

Kuha Kaun prepares to invade the Bon Valley.  If he succeeds, he will become leader of the Ston and a general war between the Ston and Jaeni will follow.  Only the Loyalists can prevent this.  And Deheya must put off rescuing her son to embolden the defeated Loyalists to act.

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In Scene 26, Deheya returns to he Loyalist camp.  When she presents General Naveen with the big picture, she learns that Colonel Grimn already knows, and has been unsuccessful in convincing General Naveen to act.

In a careful balancing game, she tries to convince General Naveen she believes in him, and that he is bold enough, and courageous enough to do this.  But, she does not want to wind up in his bed as the price for doing this.

In the end, by promising to stay with the Loyalists.  She agrees to put off a rescue mission to Regar, she convinces the General to act.

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WIP – Part Three: Scene Twenty-Five Drafted

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Part Three:  Scene Twenty-Five Drafted

Read about Part 3, Scene 24.

01 consideringIt’s day eighty-one.  I’ve completed 63 scenes, with 18 to go.  My word count reached 117,650.  My target word count was 90,000.

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Looking back to Scene 24, she accompanies Lord Corston to the Loyalist camp.  Her goal is to get Loyalist assistance to get her son back.  Instead of a determined army, ready to renew battle with Christor, she finds a demoralized group.  She realizes they cannot help her.  She suspects she could help them, but she is driven to get her son back.  So, she goes to her father for help.

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In Scene 25, Deheya returns to her Father’s Camp.  Her father is alive, although he seems as powerless to affect the outcome of events as she is.  This reality is at sharp odds with her picture of him as a man with a vision, and a plan for everything.

When she asks for his help, he tells her he cannot.  And then he goes on to explain the complexities of the situation.  Kuha Kaun is crossing the Great River, and Pia Isa is powerless to stop him.  If Kuha Kaun succeeds, the other Ston clans will join him, and Pia Isa will suffer the fate of all defeated leaders.

He leads her to understand the true peril to her, her son, and her people.  Christor does not have to act, just now, because he has won.  He expects Corston’s Loyalists to surrender, and for Pia Isa to negotiate a peace.  And, he seems willing to let Kuha Kaun scourge the Bon Valley to unite the Jaeni under Christor.  With the full vigor and anger of Jaeni at his beck and call, Christor will probably launch a war on the Ston, who are weaker and fighting among themselves. Continue reading

WIP – Part Three: Scene Twenty-Four Drafted

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Part Three:  Scene Twenty-FourDrafted

Read about Part 3, Scene 23.

01 consideringIt’s day seventy-nine.  I’ve completed 62 scenes, with 19 to go.  My word count reached 114,303.  My target word count was 90,000.  My Main Character, Deheya, grew a little more today.

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Looking back to Scene 23, Deheya began her long journey back from the victim she had become, pounded repeatedly by fate.  Think about it.  She gave up her people and her family to marry a man from a different race, a hated race.  She never loved him, but bore him a son, and would have borne him more.  But, an assassin murdered her husband.  Some say the assassin was Christor, Duke Ren Gar’s brother.  Then her father narrowly escaped death when Kuha Kaun attacked and seriously wounded hi.  Then, someone kidnapped her son.  And the whole world seems to have gone mad, with war at ever turn.  And, at least two of them contestants fight because they want her.

At the end, stripped of all her friends and support, she rallied the few men left in her escort, and, in the process regaining her outer shell, charming them into continuing something they no longer felt connected to.  In the end, after proving her physical courage in battle, she rescued Lord Corston, erstwhile leader of the Loyalists.

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WIP – Part Three: Scene Twenty-Three Drafted

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Part Three:  Scene Twenty-Three Drafted

Read about Part 3, Scene 22.

01 consideringIt’s day seventy-six.  I’ve completed 61 scenes, with 20 to go.  My word count reached 110,111.  My target word count was 90,000.  If feel as if I turned a small corner today.  For the first time, my Main Character, Deheya, grew.  And she had an unqualified success.  I guess I will allow myself a wooo hooo.

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Looking back to Scene 22, Regar has reached the Capital.  He becomes the prize in a tug of war fought by Shen Rekmon against everyone else.  Finally for the first time, we see the little Heir fought over.  The great Alfred Hitchcock often referred to the dramatic device of a prize for which everyone struggles, and he called it a McGuffin.  What it was, didn’t really matter.  What did matter was that it made people raise the stakes to get it.

For the moment, then, Shen Rekmon has thwarted Regar’s Grand Mother from taking charge of the little Heir.  And Shen Rekmon appears ascendant in his quest to be Christor’s right hand man.  Who knows what limits, if any, Shen Rekmon will set on himself.

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Scene 23 is the first of the six scenes with Deheya that will close out Part Three.  And it was the first one, after her Dark Night of the Soul and Epiphany.  This was a long scene, over 3,200 words.  And it took a long time to block out.  It probably should be two or even three shorter scenes, but I will wait until Revision mode to make changes.

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