Schemes and Scenes – Part Ten

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Schemes and Scenes – Part Ten

This is the tenth article in an occasional series on scene development.  Self-Editing For Fiction Writers, Chapter Ten, focuses on repetition, with two exercises. Read the ninth article.

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“Come on in, don’t be bashful.”

It wasn’t exactly bashfulness that was keeping me in the hallway. This was my first visit to a bachelor’s apartment, and I was shocked at how much it lived up to it’s reputation. It wasn’t just the velvet painting of Elvis on the wall above the blue velvet couch, or the orange shag rug, or the Formica coffee table, or the wall unit that looked like it was made of genuine simulated plastic wood. It was the sense that the place had been lived in, and lived in hard.

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Schemes and Scenes – Part Nine

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Schemes and Scenes – Part Nine

This is the ninth article in an occasional series on scene development.  Self-Editing For Fiction Writers, Chapter Nine, focuses on breaking paragraphs apart, with two exercises. Read the eighth article.

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It had been a quiet week in Lake Wobegon. Sunday morning Clarence Busen stepped into the shower and turned on the water — which was cold, but he’s Norwegian, he knows you have to take what you can get — and stood until it got warm, and he was reaching for the soap when he thought for sure he was having a heart attack. He’d read a Reader’s Digest story about a man’s heart attack (“My Most Unforgettable Experience”) and this felt like the one in the story — chest pain like a steel band tightening. Clarence grabbed the nozzle as the rest of the story flashed before his eyes: the ride in the ambulance, the dash to the emergency room, unconscious as the heart team worked over him, the long slow recovery and the discovery of a new set of values. But as he imagined what was about to happen, the heart attack petered out on him. The story said it felt like an elephant stepping on you. This felt more like a big dog, and then somebody whistled and the dog left. So it wasn’t a heart attack, there was no story, and Clarence felt better. Continue reading

Schemes and Scenes – Part Eight

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Schemes and Scenes – Part Eight

This is the eighth article in an occasional series on scene development.  Self-Editing For Fiction Writers, Chapter Eight, focuses on beats, with two exercises. Read the seventh article.

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“You’re sure it runs?” Mr. Dietz said.

I leaned against the fender. “It did last time I tried it.”

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Schemes and Scenes – Part Seven

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Schemes and Scenes – Part Seven

This is the seventh article in an occasional series on scene development.  Self-Editing For Fiction Writers, Chapter Seven, focuses on Internal Monolog, with three exercises. Read the sixth article.

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“Excuse me, miss, but I’m giving a seminar over in room 206 in a few minutes, and I need an overhead projector.”  The man at the door of the audiovisual room was actually wearing a tweet jacket with leather patches at the elbows.  All he needs is a pipe, Kimberley thought.

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Bare Remembrance

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Please accept my submission for Friday Fictioneers for 11 April 2014.  Forgive me if this one is dark.

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Bare Remembrance

 

gray dawnBlackness became watery light. Pounding turned to bird songs. Firmness twisted to shaking.

She swam upward. Fear stabbed her soul. Her arm shot out…emptiness. Cold sheets.

Sitting up, the sheets slithered down. The strange room swayed. She shivered, covering herself, and fell back.

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As It Turned Out…

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As It Turned Out…

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confused 2…the lesson I thought I was learning, wasn’t the one I needed.

Who likes being humiliated?

Well…except for that way.

I mean about writing.

In January, I finished my first, ever, complete, novel.  Doing what everyone said to do, I stuffed it in a drawer to let it age.

Then what?  Well, I did housework, laundry, sewed buttons on his shirt and other, more fun, wifey stuff.

What I needed was a new project.  I had a head filled with ‘how to write’ stuff, and I wanted to try it out.  I was particularly fascinated with Blake Snyder’s Save The Cat, and his fifteen beats.  If you don’t know what those are, and have any thoughts of being a serious fiction writer, that book is an absolute must.

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Schemes and Scenes – Part Six

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Schemes and Scenes – Part Six

This is the sixth article in an occasional series on scene development.  Self-Editing For Fiction Writers, Chapter Six, focuses on See How It Sounds, with two exercises.  Read the fifth article.

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As they sat quietly catching their breath, Getz said, “We’ve all been diving together for a long time and are very comfortable with each other.  I understand you’re experienced but you are new to us, so I wonder if you would mind my giving you a quick quiz, just to satisfy ourselves of your basic competence?”

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