WIP – Revising Scenes 26 and 27



Scenes 26 and 27

I revised scenes 24 and 25.


I set aside my drama and kept pushing on.

My reward?  Two scenes in two days.

 Scene 26 (April 27th)

When I originally planned scenes 25 and 26, I knew I had timing issues.  I had moved things around and I was pretty sure things would not fit.  And they didn’t.

I ran into conflict between what I needed my scenes to do vs what the scene templates emphasized.  All that sounds vague.  But I needed my MC to make critical decisions in Scene 25.  She intellectually resisted her choices, but welcomed in her heart.  That meant I couldn’t introduce her future mentor.  So, that had to wait.

When I reached scene 26, I had intended to use drama, but I needed to get her mentor properly introduced.  So, I decided on dialog.  I got her introduced to him, and to readers, which I so wanted to do.  I also used reveals inherent within dialog scenes to spring yet another twist on her plans, placing her in greater dangers and no good place to turn to.  Perfect.
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WIP – Revising Scenes 24 and 25



Scenes 24 and 25

I revised scene 23.


Our car broke down.

We didn’t get very far

So I came home and went back to work

I found time to write, but I didn’t get nearly as much done as I might have.  It’s just that it’s so easy to find other things to do.

Some of them even without my computer.  Ha.

 Scene 24 (April 22nd)

Scene 24 was always going to be action.  And I thought it would be easy to write.


My problem was that I wanted a lot of build up to get into it.  I stripped down as much as I could, wishing I’d had another scene to help set this one up.  I spent 300 of my 1200 words before their knives came out.  I tried to pep up their dialog with barbs and verbal combat, letting it escalate into their knife fight.

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WIP – Revising Scene 23



Scene 23

I revised scene 22.



I hate it.

But I’m more alert and motivated under pressure.

I hate that too.

I found out I will be going out-of-town after all.  I could have just said screw it and stopped writing my next scene.  Instead, here it is after midnight.  And I just finished it.  And I will have to drive tomorrow.  But that’s what caffeine is for, right?

 Scene 23 (April 21st)

When I replanned my WIP, I planned to revise one of my scenes.  As I read through my old scene, I realized I should have merged it with a second scene.  So I adjusted my outline.  While that may seem like a deviation, I have clear memories of what I wanted to do.  Somehow I had written it down wrong.

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WIP – Revising Scene 22



Scene 22

I revised scene 20 and 21.


One day.

One scene.

After struggling all last week, I wanted to prove to myself I still cared, that I could still do this.

Scene 22 (April 20)

When I revised my scene list, I decided scene 22 would be perfect as a dramatic scene.  I had decided to change my POV.  I also discovered that how I ended scene 21 left me with continuity problems going into scene 22.

When I went back and looked at how I’d ended scene 21, I found I had created problems for myself.  When I ended with a cliffhanger, I couldn’t just start where I’d planned my next scene.  Simply starting where I wanted to start was too jarring.

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WIP – Revising Scenes 20 and 21



Scenes 20 and 21

I revised scene nineteen.


Do I really like surprises?

I wonder.

When I found out I wasn’t going out-of-town this week, I assumed I would have found time for writing.  Dreams of revising at least one scene each day collided with my life.  And…who know I would be so tired?

So, instead of racing through Part Two, I slowed down.  I only got through three scenes.  I’m dismayed.  At this rate, I won’t be done with my first revisions until…who knows when?  Maybe never.

I’m so aware of writing that I’m almost paralyzed at times.  I have thousands of words, few fitting my scene template.  I find myself dithering.  I know what’s happening.  I’m stirring my stew until my intuition kicks in.  And then I go write.

My new approach seems to have become pull up my old scene, pull out my notes, and copy over my chosen scene type template.  Then I fiddle and fiddle and fiddle.  And, finally, I write something.  Only I know I’m not done.  Next morning, I have different ideas of how to write my scene.

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WIP – Revising Scene Nineteen



Scene Nineteen

I revised scene eighteen.

23I didn’t go out-of-town this week…maybe next week.  Mini vacation.

I took time to remember what I am trying to do with my revisions.  First, I need to cut my word count down from 170,000 to 120,000.  And, I need to get my story proportions right.  I want Parts One and Four to each be 20% of my word count, while Parts 2 and 3 to each be 30%.


Because I’m experimenting with Blake Snyder’s Beats, the ones he wrote about in Save The Cat, along with some features suggested by Larry Brooks in Story Engineering.  Part Two has two book ends, Plot Point One and the Mid Point.  Sitting in the middle is something called Pinch Point One.  Maybe I will write a post on how I’m trying to use these devices.  Anyway, if Plot Point One happens at 24,000 words, and the Mid Point happens at 60,000 words, Pinch Point One comes at 41,000 words.  When I get there, I will need to slip a targeted scene in, showing the villain’s nature.  And it will need to naturally flow from what has come before. Continue reading

WIP – Revising Scene Eighteen



Scene Eighteen

I revised scene seventeen.

23With completion of Scene Eighteen, I finished Part One.  I’m too inexperienced to know if I did well or not.  Only when I read it will I hope to have any idea how well I did.

Scene Eighteen (April 12th)

I wanted to recast Scene Eighteen as Suspense.  As I read my First Draft’s version, I could see that I had tried to bend it toward suspense.  But, however much I might reach for it, my material was wrong.  I had not chosen an appropriate trigger for my scene.

Using Rosenfeld’s template, I went about reimagining my scene.  I could not find the trigger.  I pondered it all day Saturday, feeling pressure to finish my scene and my first part.  I outlined my scene, hoping something would occur to me.  But, when I went to bed, I didn’t have it. Continue reading