Scenes 48 – 51
Four scenes in two days.
I wonder if they are any good? Or have I hacked so much out that I can no longer follow my story?
Scene 48 which became Scene 47 (9 June)
I swapped my scene order. Scene 48 became scene 47.
When I approached this scene, I needed to change my POV. I wanted to bring readers up to date on another subplot. And I need this subplot because this will all come to a head as we move into Part Four.
Since I was imparting new information, I chose Rosenfeld’s Dialog template. I hope in infused enough tension into my scene to keep readers turning the page.
I also saw a change to enhance the reveal in the old Scene 47. By moving this scene before the big reveal, I could add more pressure and tension. I hope.
Scene 49 (9 June)
Starting with Scene 49, my MC quickly spirals down to her lowest point. I had given this sequence much thought. My fear was that I would have to compress so much no one would be able to follow the jumps.
I was greatly aided in writing this because, in an earlier writing exercise, I had used part of this scene to experiment with Sandra Scofield’s scene layering. Inspired, I banged it out.
By moving our microscope in just a little, I focused on others sacrificing themselves for her, and getting her to change her direction. I used Rosenfeld’s Suspense template, more or less.
Scene 50 (10 June)
I feared writing Scene 50. This is my ALL IS LOST SCENE. And I had used three scenes in my first draft. With just 1,500 words, I wasn’t sure I could weave anything coherent. I decided on action, in part, because I wouldn’t have to spend lots of words on her internalities.
I missed, hitting a bit over 1,900. I hope I got what I needed.
Scene 51 (10 June)
Scene 51 also scared me. I had to write her DARK NIGHT OF THE SOUL / EPIPHANY. I leaned heavily on Rosenfeld’s suggestions.
When I’d written my first draft, I’d spent time in her mind. And, for the most part, I stayed there. I needed her to move from selfishness to sacrifice. I hope I made it believable.
How Am I Doing?
I’m up to 84,020 words, 466 under my target for Part Three. And I’ve reached 56 scenes with 23 to go.
But, I’m not free and clear yet.
I still have to cut 17,000 original words in my last six scenes. I’m keeping my fingers crossed because I just cut 7,000 words in my last four scenes I’ve just written. How can I keep this up? My tummy continues to churn.