My WIP’s Third Revision – Critiques (6)


My WIP’s Third Revision

Critiques (6)

I halted the critiquing of my WIP.

cover 1I’m trying to balance my time between beta reading, working on my story, and living my life.

Something had to give, so I asked family and friends to…leave me alone.  Yikes.

Beta Reading

This week we critiqued Ash’s story.

I’m happy I read it and hope my thoughts might have helped her.  But, I found myself in the minority as the two guys didn’t agree with me on several things.  Ash will have to decide what she wants to do.

When we read our first story, I worried that David ran all of it through Scrib before trying beta reads.  Then I found out Ash hadn’t posted much of her story for critique, starting with beta reading.  So, I feel better, because only part of my story has been critted.

Continue reading


My WIP’s Third Revision – Critiques (5)


My WIP’s Third Revision

Critiques (5)

My story remained in the critique process.

cover 1I took Part One of my WIP down from further Scribophile critiques.

I had hoped more people would read it and like what I had done, but…

Beta Reading

Three of us got on-line with the writer of our first beta read for nearly an hour.  This was after I had already read his story and sent him my comments.  The story was well crafted.  Several things stood out for me.

First, David was hoping we would tell him his story is ready to send to an agent or a publisher.  I wondered about it as I read it, and I’m not quite sure it is.  The writerly portions of it were well done, and he said he had gotten crits on all his scenes, but had not gotten anything at a story level before.  Two of us thought it needed more work, but one, a guy, thought it was okay.  So, I wonder if we were seeing a gender difference.

Continue reading

My WIP’s Third Revision – Critiques (4)


My WIP’s Third Revision

Critiques (4)

My story remained in the critique process.

cover 1My entire Part One remains up on Scribophile for critiquing, but the system will soon lock my first and second postings soon, meaning no one will be able to write about them anymore.

My First Experience With Beta Reading

I did a beta reading of a SciFi story on Scribophile.  When I first read it, I just let myself glide along in the story.  It felt a little on the simple side, but was full of action, and easy to read.  I was very impressed, and do not think I measure up very well.

Only when I went back into it did I begin to find things I might change had I written it.  But, we write very differently.  He wrote in First Person Past Tense, while I wrote in Third Person Past Tense.  He used a single POV, I’ve used four.  As I pushed deeper, I realized he had done, or not done, some things I think are important.

In my story, at a point called Plot Point One, my Main Character decides to try to solve the Story Question.  And, once made, she starts down a path and cannot go back.  In the book I read, I couldn’t see that the writer had done this.  Everything just seemed to slide from one bit of action to another.

At another point, called the Epiphany, my Main Character struggles to make sense of the mess she has made of her life, and all the damage she has caused because of her flaws.  And then she realizes what she must change in herself, and then decides to change her ways.  I didn’t really get the same impression in the story.  Because he did not struggle with his question, I didn’t feel much tension.

At the Climax, my Main Character struggles with all her might against her enemies, and, in the end, finally wins.  After that, she rescues her son and wins.  In the story I read, I did not get the sense that the main character was really the hero.

My Own Story

I continued to chip away at my WIP, fixing my Main Character’s speech patterns.  Because of family obligations, I was not able to finish them.  But I’ve made good progress.

What’s Next?

I hope to finish fixing my Main Character’s speech and word choices.  I have taken far longer to do it than I imagined, in part, because I haven’t been very happy about doing it.

I still have parts of the Magic System I would like to change.  I realize now, when I created it, I created a good side.  But I can see, now that adding an opposite, or dark side, could add more depth to the magic, and might help me make it more complete.

After this weekend, we should go on to another Beta Reading.  Alas, I’m not ready.  Maybe I can go in third place.  I’m still anxious to do this, because I would like to get people’s opinions before I redo Part One.  The longer I wait, the more likely I am to just go ahead and make changes.

I continued in the Beta Process.

My WIP’s Third Revision – Critiques (3)


My WIP’s Third Revision

Critiques (3)

My story remained in the critique process.

cover 1My entire Part One remains up on scribophile for critiquing, but the early flurry has died down to a trickle.

How does Critiquing Work?

Every writer wants to post their work for critique.  On Scrib, as we call it, posting a 3,000 word story or part costs 5 karma.  We cannot buy karma.  We can only earn it…by critiquing other people’s works.  Usually, we need to critique about two or three works to earn enough karma to post a story of our own.

So, when I wanted to post my Part One in eleven parts, I needed 55 karma, or around fifteen critiques to earn that much.

Because I decided to pay $65.00 to be a premium member, I can post as much of my work at one time as I have karma for, and put it in a personal spotlight.  The spotlight allows people to earn more karma than normal.  I can throw in bonus karma, so they can easily earn 2 or 2.5 karma.  That means they can post their own work more quickly.  After six critiques, the work moves out of the personal spotlight, and it becomes hard to earn more than about 1.5 karma for critiquing it.

Continue reading