My WIP’s Fourth Revision – Fight and Battle Scenes (2)


My WIP’s Fourth Revision

Fight and Battle Scenes (2)

I rewrote one of my fight scenes.

cover 1I’m pulling my hair out.

My beta readers didn’t feel immersed in my battle or fight scenes.  I knew they were right the moment I read the comment.

I admit it.

I don’t know how to write fight scenes.

Still, I’ve tried…three times…to write my stupid fight scene, and a pretty easy one by the way.  I haven’t gotten to the battle scenes, which are waaaaaaaay hard.

Write what life looks like

Ever had this happen to you?  You beat your brains out and ask for help on what you are doing wrong, asking for suggestions?

Only most people want to talk in general terms, and I should write them that way.


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My WIP’s Fourth Revision – Fight and Battle Scenes (1)


My WIP’s Fourth Revision

Fight and Battle Scenes (1)

My beta readers reacted to my story.

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How many of you skim through battle scenes?

Raise your hand!

Me too.

And I have a bunch in my story.

And they aren’t very good.

How ‘Bout Them Apples?

Elmore Leonard said, “Just snip the boring bits out.”

How tempting.  After all, isn’t that one of the tricks of writing?  Leave some of the stuff off-stage?  Sure, Shakespeare had fighting, but he never had casts of thousands swinging from one pirate ship to another.  Why?  Because he didn’t have room on stage.

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My WIP’s Third Revision – The Betas Spoke


My WIP’s Third Revision

The Beta’s Spoke

I working on my WIP.

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No…not really…quite.

David, Ash and Alan were the only other people besides my Trusted Reader to go all the way through my story.  Overall, they were very supportive and said nice things.  I knew better than to ask them if I was ready to go.

We had a group of four.  If you’ve read some of my other postings, you know I went last because I was the largest and I was still working on it.  I was very impressed with the other WIPS.  If ever I’d thought I was a special snowflake I found out I’m not.

Still, this is my first serious WIP.  And while I wrote trashy stuff on another website, about the only thing I can say for it is that I was too dumb to know what I didn’t know and just laid it all out there.  Once I decided I wanted to be serious, I looked to the how-to-write-books books for help on story structure and scene structure.  And…it works.

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Am I Really This Dumb?


Am I Really This Dumb?

pictureHow could I get all the way through school and not know the difference between breath and breathe?  I can’t believe I just discovered this.

I remember a time in school when we kept a diary.  And I discovered February had two R‘s in it.  My teacher wrote with her red pen, fixing every one of my entries.  And…we had to do peer reviews.  I felt like a complete ditz.

I want to be taken seriously as a writer.  But, yikes.  How many other words and phrases do I misuse?

You guys must read my blog for comedy material.  Ha.

My WIP’s Third Revision – Critiques (7)


My WIP’s Third Revision

Critiques (7)

I working on my WIP.

cover 1I’m waiting on three beta readers…and I’m very nervous

My Beta Read

I reordered Part One and inserted three new scenes hours before I sent it to my three beta readers on Sunday.

I committed a terrible sin…I relied on Word’s spell checker.  I didn’t have time to go through my entire story with ProWritingAid.  I did that on Monday…and was horrified.  I debated whether to play dumb, or be that girl and offer them a cleaned up file.  So, rather than have them think me illiterate, I decided on bimbo…and offered them new files.

The woman was nice about it.  One guy was pissed.  I didn’t hear from the third.  Gender gap?  Ha. Continue reading