Draft Of The Second Grimn’s Tale


Draft of the Second Grimn’s Tale

Time For The Trusted Reader

A half-year ago I conceived of a series Hero’s Arc.

And I wrote the first tale, but used more words than I’d planned on.   I wrote THE END a bit over four months ago, creating a story suitable for Alpha Readers. But, unhappy with my word-count struggles, I didn’t. Instead, I went off on vacation for a week or two.

With my return, I considered asking readers their opinion, but didn’t. Uppermost was that nagging writer insecurity — had I proven myself a fool? But, worse, I’d failed on the word count. I nearly cried.

More navel gazing commenced, then I decided to try the second Grimn’s Tale and aim for the word count. I started writing it four months ago, desperately hoping for 16,000 words. If I reached the goal I would know to go back and hack at the first story. And, in nineteen days, I brought in a 23,000 word draft. And, after I set my story on a shelf to age, I nurtured faint hopes of cutting words to make it fit my goal.

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Chelson’s Bridge – Fourth Revision Complete


Chelson’s Bridge – Fourth Revision

I’m Done…Now What?

Read about completing Revision Three.


When I began revision four, editing, I’d used 15,661 words, beyond the 12,000 word plan…which I commented on in another post. Despite using editing tricks developed in my last WIP, a scant 650 words came out, creating a tighter, denser and more interesting story. But, with 15,011 words, that’s 3,011 beyond my target.

How disappointing to not reach my word-count goal. If I had an answer, I’d happily pass it along. When I figure something out, I’ll post it.

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Chelson’s Bridge – It’s Too Big


Chelson’s Bridge – Too Big

What To Do?

Read about completing my Third Draft .

Big time doubt.


I planned to write my story in 12,000 words…but passed that count with the fifteenth scene, and three yet unwritten.

14,800 words…first draft…with zillions of problems.

17,735 words…first revision…plot holes fixed…maybe.

14,543 words…second revision…scene structures fixed.

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Chelson’s Bridge – Third Revision Complete


Third Draft Complete

Character Arcs and Dialog

Read about how I fixed  faults discovered by my Trusted Reader .

Third revision…complete…six days.

All character arcs installed…real dialog written.

As my first step, I went through each scene and color coded paragraphs based on the owning character. Because I write Third Person Close, every unclaimed line belongs to the MC. This means no external narrator, and we experience everything through the POV character. In all, I identified the MC and seven others with potentially having arcs.

Then, starting with the least important character with the fewest scenes, I focused on their paragraphs, chasing them through the entire story. In most cases, there wasn’t a great deal of arc. But that wasn’t true for the good friend turned suspicious, the jealous girlfriend, or the indifferent new girl. And the MC ran the Hero’s Journey arc with flaws eventually causing a major problem that he couldn’t fix until he came to terms with them, then went on to defeat the bad-guy. Did he get something he wanted and needed?

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Chelson’s Bridge – Thank You Trusted Reader


Trusted Reader Confusion Dispelled


Read about my reaction to Trusted Reader’s Confusion.

Well…I finished the Second Revision…again.

If that sounds familiar, it’s because I announced the same thing a week ago.

Then Trusted Reader comments ruined everything. To bad…so sad.

Four confusing things.  But how did they apply to my story.  So, I dug deeper.  Between her thoughts and my suspicions, I found 55 changes in 16 of 18 scenes.

But I couldn’t deny several underlying scene structure problems. One action scene used too much front-end material. The solution? Rewrite the scene without the front-end material and save it for a rainy day…which came the next day in a new scene which established another scene.

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Chelson’s Bridge – Trusted Reader Confusion


Trusted Reader Reacts to Chelson’s Bridge


Read about my second revision.


Not hoped for words from my Trusted Reader.

And I’m shocked.

I’d assumed my understanding of craft had improved, along with story structure, particularly the Hero’s Journey.

Wrong…and wrong.

Nor has my skin grown any thicker. It took a bit to move beyond an emotional reaction and discuss her thoughts. She didn’t understand the world view, nor did she get the McGuffen.

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Chelson’s Bridge – Second Revision Complete


Second Revision of Chelson’s Bridge

Fixing Scene Structure

Read about my first revision.

Second revision…done…four days.


What’s a second revision?

Great question. With our first draft we captured our tale, and the first revision corrected story structure and plot line problems.

The second addresses scene structure.

Again…what does that mean?

Readers understand all scenes aren’t identical. Car chase scenes have a different feel from Hitchcock’s suspense scenes. It’s easy to conjure other examples…or get her book. And I applied Jordan Rosenfeld’s teachings from Make A Scene, picking and choosing from her ten scene types.

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